school blog

New Technology

2010-12-12T02:30:00.000-08:00

The computer and the internet became(gr.) a big part in our lives. The(מיותר) These new technologies have given us a lot of new possibilities. We can work on the computer, we can learn things and communicate whit(sp.) each other. In the last few years, there are a lot of people that(ww. - who) believe that computers will be able to replace teachers one day. I would like to state my opinion on this issue.

On one hand, the use of the computers as a replacement to the teacher has (a) few benefits such as, students will be able learn without going to the school and the student will be able to learn wan(sp.) he will have(gr.) free time(So, how is this beneficial? You should explain that this means that it will be more convenient, for example). Also students that are having difficulties in a specific subject he(מיותר) will be able to go on(ww. - over) the material all the times that he will need(phr.+gr. - as many times as they need).

On the other hand, computer(s) cannot replace the social experiences and the social stimuli. As humans, we need to be surrounded by others and be able to talk, shear(sp.) experiences et cetera. In my opinion, social skills are more important than studying and saving time.

To sum up, in my opinion computers will be able to replace teachers one day. But I think it should be only computers also teacher(phr. -not clear what you mean) - This is too short and to vague for a conclusion.

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Daphna

Car accidents

2010-11-04T07:40:00.000-07:00

Young drivers are involved in many accidents today. For example, last week a seventeen year old young driver was involved in an accident that had happened because he drove too fast. An organization of accident victims has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19 in order to reduce the number of accidents in which young drivers are involved.

I support the proposal of the organization of accident victims to rise(ww.) the age of getting a driver's license to 19. Young drivers of the age of 17 are not mature enough to understand that driving can be dangerous and fatal. of the age of 17 you only think about all the benefits of having a driver's license when you have a driver's license, you do not have to depend on your parents and you do not need to ride on bus.

Also, young drivers of the age of 17 on the road are not paying(gr) attention to the road and what is happening around them as well as someone of the age of 19. A driver that is 19 years old is more aware of the dangers on the road because his way of thinking is more responsible and mature.

To conclude, I think that the proposal should be accepted by the government immediately because the more we wait, the more young drivers are hurt in accidents and killed.

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Daphna

2010-10-06T23:30:00.000-07:00

In the lest(sp.+ww.) years the Internet has took(gr.) a big part in our lives. We communicate through the Internet,searching(gr.) (for) information and working(gr.) in(ww.) the Internet. The Internet has a positive side but a negative to.(phr.)

On the one hand, the Internet gives us the opportunity to communicate with people from different places in the world. We can communicate with relatives and friends that is(gr.+ww.) in different places in the world through a web camera or through a microphone on line. Also, in our spare time we can play games on line or read different articles.

On the other hand, the Internet prevents people from meeting each other face to face, to see ache(sp.) other's face expressions and the look in their eyes when they talk with you . Also(try a different connector this time) the many hours that we spend in front of the computer are causing(gr.) us to not go outside or exercise(phr.). (A new sentence) because of that(phr. - As a result,) in this(ww.) days many people have health problems.(You should mention, in short, what kind of problems, like being overweight and out of shape)

In conclusion, the Internet affected(gr.) on our lives in many aspects.In my opinion, there has to be a balance between the time that we spend in front of the computer and the time that we spend outside or with people.

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Daphna

The Matriculation exams

2010-09-13T02:45:00.000-07:00

The common opinion about the Matriculation exams is that they are the most reliable way of testing a student’s knowledge. But do they really reflect the knowledge of the students? In my opinion, the Matriculation exams are(gr.) not always reflect the real knowledge of the students ,the time and work that they have had put in learning.

On the one hand, The Matriculation exams are very stressful because the exams are(מיותר) summarize all the work that you have done through the year and often many students, because of the stress you can forget some of the material that you have learned(phr. - tend to forget the material they have learned because of the stress).Also, you can forget to answer a question and that is(מיותר) damages the grade and not really shows the knowledge that you really have (Your phrasing is very awkward)

On the other hand, When you are in the classroom, taking the Matriculation exam, your phone is in your bag, that is near the door. The only things on your table is a few pens, a pencil an eraser. Nobody disturbs or asks you things, you have the time and the silence that you need and the only thing that you have to think about is the exam. In this way, the students are(מיותר) answer the questions from their own knowledge.In this wey(מיותר) (and) we can see what the student is(מיותר) really knows.(You should use the word:to concentrate and try to expalin more clearly)

To sum up, the Matriculation exams are only one way to test the students' knowledge and there are other ways, like writing projects. So, we can not rely only on the Matriculation exams and give the students more ways to express their knowledge(phr. - and provide other ways for students to show their knowledge).

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Daphna

Friends

2010-09-11T10:11:00.000-07:00

Everyone has a different definition about(ww. - of) who is a friend and who is not. For one person a friend is someone that he spends time with him(מיותר). For someone else a friend is someone that he can trust no matter what. For me, a friend need(gr.) to have a few main characteristics.

First of all, in my opinion, a friend has to be someone that you can trust with your eyes closed(phr. - this is Hebrew), someone that you can tell everything in the world and not be afraid that he might tell someone alls(sp.). A person that has a friend that he can trust is a happier person because he does not have to deal with all of his problems alone and in difficult times he can always be sure that his friend will make him fell(sp.) better.

Also,a good friend is someone that will help you and give you the best advices(מיותר) that he has . We often find ourselves in situations in which we have never been, and we can ask for advice from a friend, that might was in this situation or in a similar situation(phr.).So he can help us, or at least give us his point of view of the situation. Even if the advice does not help us, we learn how we can deal with different problems that we might run in to them(מיותר) in the future.

To sum up, a friend is like another member of your family, that will be always (verb?)next to you ,will help you and just spend time with you without any expectation(s) to get something in return.

This is much better. Well done.

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Daphna

Application for studies

2010-04-29T00:52:00.000-07:00

12,Shenkar street
Holon
29, April 2010

Harvard University
65 Pine street ,Cambridge
Massachusetts

Dear Sir/Madam,

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I am 23 years old I have studied veterinary medicine for two years now. I heard that your university is offering excellent biology and chemistry courses that I am interested in. I am writing to you because I would like to apply for admission to your school for completing my degree in veterinary medicine.
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I am interested in the Biology and Chemistry courses because I need them to complete my degree in veterinary medicine, but also because I have had always an interest in studying those subjects. Biology and chemistry were my meager(sp.) subjects in high school and I want to continue studying the(ww.) subjects in much serious frame like university(phr.) .
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In addition to my hopes to finish my veterinary studies, I also love the idea of studying in Harvard. Since I was a little girl, I have always dreamed to study in Harvard. I love the environment in Cambridge and I have been thinking about studying abroad for a long time.
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I would be grateful if you could send me more information about the courses, the total cost of the courses and the residence choices that exist in Harvard.

Thank you for your assistance.

I look forward to hearing from you.
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Truly yours,
Anna Smith

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Daphna

A trip to the USA

2010-04-14T22:24:00.000-07:00

88 Pine Street
Holon
April 4, 2010

"See the World"
88, First avenue
New York, NY

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am twenty-three years old and I have just completed my military service. I am writing to you because I am interested to go on a trip in the USA and I would like to know more about the activities that your travel agency is offering. Also, I would like to know what is the age grope that are going to(phr.) this trip and which states the trip includes.
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I am interested in a trip that includes extreme sports like climbing, and tours in the popular sites, Niagara Falls, Navy Pier, and museums. Also, I would like to know if the trip offers any night life, such as, clubs casinos.
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I would like to know in which hotels the group is going to stay.In addition, I need information about the total cost of the trip to the USA, the number of people is in the group. I would be thankful if you send me more specific details about the trip's schedule.
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Finally, I hope that you reply as soon as you can and answer all my questions. I am looking forward to the trip.

Sincerely yours,
Mary Smith

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Daphna

Radio show

2010-04-06T10:59:00.003-07:00

88 Pine Street
Holon
April 4, 2010

Manager
Holon's local radio station
10 sokolove Street
Holon

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am sixteenth years old, I have heard about your plans to produce a series of one-hour programs for teenagers on ours local radio station. I am writing to you because I want to suggest you (unnecessary) an idea for the radio programs that. in my opinion. will interest teenagers (new sentence) which(ww. - The program) will discuss how to mange right the time.

On this radio show, teenagers will be able to ask how to mange their time right, so they have the time to do homework, to learn(ww.) to(ww.) exams and to rest from the day in school. They will get advices from other listeners, that are in(unnecessary) their age or they have been past(phr.) the same problem. Also, from time to time will come an expert(wo.) that can help the listeners.

In my opinion, this subject is important because many students do not know how to mange(sp.) their time right so they choose to not(wo.) do homework or not learn(ww.) all the material to(ww.) the exam and that influence(gr.) their grades . Many students are exhausted from going to school and dealing(with) all the problems that are connected to learning and searching the way that will make these experiences much easier.

To conclude, I think that it is the most suitable time for this subject because the period of the bagrut exams are(gr.) starting and this show will help many teenagers to pass(ww.) this period (successfully/more easily). Therefore, I believe that such a program will be very useful for them. I would like to thank you for considering my suggestion.

Yours sincerely,

Mary Poppins

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Daphna

Gadna week

2010-03-03T22:35:00.000-08:00

Two months ago all the eleventh graders from my school went on a Gadna week that took place in the south of Isreal.The purpose of the Gadna week is to show us,eleventh graders, how to be a soldier in Israel and what they go through in the military boot camp. I enjoyed on the Gadna week, even though we left one day earlier.

On our first day in the Gadna base the commanders divided us (in)to groups: six girls and six boys. The commanders showed us the tents in wich(sp.) we slept(gr. - were supposed to sleep) all the(מיותר) week, the tents was(gr.) divided in the same way like the groups.We also receved(sp.) uniforms and all the(מיותר) week we needed to wear them. On the second day, the commanders showed us the base and explained (to) us how to bahave(sp.), and how to talk with the commanders.

On the third day, we had an(מיותר) weapons(מיותר) lessons. We learnd how to hold correctly the weapons(wo.), wich(sp.) position for shooting is right, how we shold(sp.) behave in(a) firing range. On our last day on the Gadna base we went to the firing range, every student shoot(gr. - use the past) twelve bullets toward a target and in the end of the shooting practice we could take the target that we shoot(gr.) on(ww.). Before we left the gadna base we had(ww. - participated on a) certificate(ww.) ceremony with our commanders.

Finally, I highly recomend to all the eleventh graders that hesitate if(ww. - whether) to go to the Gadna week or not, to go to(ww. - on) this trip. Even though this week is very hard he(ww. - it) (is) also a very fun week. You get to know pepole that you do not talk with(ww. - to) in(מיותר) every day and it gives you the opportunity to experiens(sp.) new things.

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Daphna

letter of complaint to a travel agency

2010-02-17T07:06:00.000-08:00

88 Pine Street
Holon
February 18, 2010

Travel agency

10 Shenkar Street
Holon

Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to complain about your organized vacation and the misleading information that I was given on the Internet about the organized trip I took. On my last vacation that was organized by your travel agency, that took place in Greece, I received bad services, I did not enjoy of the vacation and nothing on that vacation went as planned.

First of all, when I arrived at the hotel and saw it, I was in shock. The hotel was small and in the middle of no where , with bad service and terrible food opposed to what I read. I read that the hotel are in the middle of an ancient Greek neighborhood with a view to the ocean, with excellent service and with high quality food that was served in the hotel restaurant

Secondly, the guide that was attached to us wasn't friendly enough, he told inappropriate jokes and was incredibly rough and his explanation weren't comprehensible. Moreover, the route and sites chosen for the trip were not interesting and did not include all the sites that I read about in the internet site of your travel agency.

Finally, I am disappointed and irritated that I waste my money on this disappointing trip and on this terrible client service .I hope for a compensation and that you will relate to my complaint as soon as you can.

I look forward to your replay .

Yours truly,

Anastasia Kostenko.

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Daphna

A letter of application

2010-01-28T04:46:00.000-08:00

88 Pine Street
Holon
January 28, 2010

Pet Help organization

10 Shenkar Street
Holon

Dear Sir/Madam,

I have read about your organization, "Pet Help", in the local news paper. In the article I read that in your organization you take care of animals that do not have a home or animals that are injured. I would like to join the organization because I think that I have the appropriate skills for the job ,I love animals and taking care of them.

First of all, I an sixteen years old , I am a student at Kugel High School and I live In Holon.

The main reason for my application to the “Pet Help” is my love for animals. I had loved animals since I remember my self, I have always loved animals and I helped every animal that was hurt or did not have a home. I even have had a cat for almost eleven years.

Secondly, I believe that I can help the organization professionally. For the last two years I am an intern in a veterinarian clinic and I am also learning in a veterinary course. Due to my professional experience with animals I think that I am suitable for the job.

Finally, I would like to join your organization and help the organization in taking care of the animals in the organization shelter. I believe I can contribute a lot to the organization and to the animals .I hope that you will choose me for this jod.

I look forward to your replay.

Yours truly,

Anastasia Kostenko

Good.

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Daphna

Virtual Schools

2009-12-29T01:09:00.000-08:00

In the past few years many students prefer to learn from the internet or with the help of a teacher through the internet. Students prefer to study that way because it is easier for them to learn from the internet since they spend a lot of time in front of the computer, and to join a virtual class all they need to do is get the address and go on line to its site.

The Virtual class gives the opportunity to learn to people that don’t have the possibility to go to school and learn in the classroom like every one else and to the students that have difficulties in the classroom.Those students can go home and enter the site of theVirtual class and ask for help from the teachers or from the other students on the site .

Inspite of the advantages of the Virtual class, it also has a very significant disadvantage. Students that learn through the internet do not develop relationships with other people. Also, those students soend most of their time in front of the computer screen and talk with their friends on the internet, so they do not make an effort to go out side and meet them face to face.

I think that the Virtual class is a unique way to learn. But, all the students need to learn in a public school and use the Virtual class like assistance(phr.) in the learning process because this way it will not influence the students' social skills

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Daphna

A Trip to Poland

2009-12-17T09:59:00.000-08:00

88 Pine Street
Spring Valley

December 3,2009

Mrs. Gilat Simon
Kugel High School

Principal
1 Mota Gore Street
Holon

Dear Ms. Gilat Simon,

Every year 11th graders from your school go on a trip to Poland with a group of Israeli students and teachers. I am writing because I wish to complain about the high price that parents have to pay for their children to go on a trip to Poland. This trip is very significant to Israelis and Jews and I think that it is very unfortunate that only the students that can pay that price can go on this trip.

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First of all, as an 11th grade student, I want to go on this important journey, that includes tours to concentration camps in Poland, which is very significant to Israelis and Jews. But, because of the very high price, some students and my self will not take part in this trip to Poland.

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In addition , Some of the students that want to go on the trip to Poland have personal reasons- a member of their family survived the Holocaust and they want to see with their own eyes what the family members went through. But, unfortunately, they can not go because of the high price.

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In conclusion, I think that this kind of trip is very important for the students and it is unfortunate that not all the students will have the opportunity to go on this trip. I will be grateful if you consider to lower the price of the trip.

I look forward to a prompt reply.

Yours truly,
Anastasia Kostenko.

This is much better. Good work.

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Daphna

George

2009-11-05T04:38:00.000-08:00

George Stoynovich is a 20 year old young man who dropped out of school when he was 16 years old. His family is an immigrant family, probably from Poland. He lives with his father and his older sister.
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The writer describes the environment in which George grew up. He grew up in a small apartment with his father and Sophie, his sister, George’s mother died when he was a child . George is described as lazy, he does not read any books, except for the magazines, that Sophie brings from work and does not do anything useful with his life.
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During the day, George did not go outside the apartment because he felt that people do not respect him. He went outside in the evenings to a park, the only place where he let himself dream about a better life. One evening during his walk to the park, he met Mr. Cattanzara and told him that he was reading books to improve his education, but he wasn't really reading any.Mr. Cattanzara told this to the people in the neighborhood and they started to respect George. From that point, George was fearful that people would find out the truth and stop respecting him.
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In my opinion, George made a mistake when he told Mr. Cattanzara that he was reading books when he was not, because he took the risk that someone would discover the truth. I hope that George will have a better life and that he will finish reading all the books that he has chosen.

This is better.

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Daphna

A book Review

2009-10-22T05:44:00.000-07:00

Recently I read a crime fiction book written by H.R.F Keating. Its name is “Inspector Ghote breaks an egg” .This book is a nice way to escape from the everyday life to a world of mystery.

The main character is inspector Ghote of the Bombay Police, that was sent to a small, distant town .He was requested to investigate the sudden death of the wife of an ambitious young politician in the small town.

When inspector Ghote tries to solve the mysterious death of the wife of the politician he needs to deal with lot of problems that stand between him and the solution of the death of the woman. Also, when he starts to investigate the people who were involved in some way with the case, they disappear or do not want to tell him about the death . Ghote noticed that one thing connects all of them – the young politician who now is the town chairman and also the only suspect.

I highly recommend reading this book. The book is interesting ,delightful and I was just fascinated by the plot of the book. I recommend This book for kids and adults as one.

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Daphna

2009-10-12T09:40:00.000-07:00

Every one of us chooses every day what to eat. Some of us choose to eat healthy food, like vegetables, fruits, others eat unhealthy and processed food. In my opinion, we are responsible for our nutrition and not the food manufactories.

First of all, the food manufactories add to the food many unhealthy ingredient like preservatives , that can damage our body. Most manufacturers don’t care that the food they produce is not healthy. All they care of is how to sell more products and earn more money. Because of that,it is our responsibility to check what are we eat.

Moreover, if people want to eat healthy and nutritious food they should buy organic food without any chemical additives, that might be in processed food. Should not trust on what food manufactories writer on the food covers.

Finally, if we want to keep our body in good condition and be healthy, all we need to do is to pay attention of what we eat and of the quantity of the food that we eat.

Daphna

letter to the editor

2009-09-17T04:51:00.000-07:00

132 Fleetwoo Street

Ashville

September 20,2009

The Editor

Around Town

P.O Box 52

Ashville

Dear Editor,

I am writing in response to the article “Ethiopian pupils not welcome in Petah Tikva”.I would like to express my opinion about the decision of the schools in Petah Tikva.I feel that the schools do not have the right to decide who goes to school and who does not.

To begin with, I think that every child has the right to go to school, no matter what theirs skin color or from where they come from. I am against the treatment that the Ethiopian students have to suffer because of theirs skin color.

As for the schools that is against teaching the Ethiopian students, I think that they make a mistake, and just increase the problem of Racial discrimination against the Ethiopians. In this way they prevent from the students in those schools connections with Ethiopians.

In conclusion, I hope that this problem will be solved soon, and that the students will be able to go to school without any problem.

Yours truly,

Anastasia .k.

Daphna

Dilemma: Who Decides Whether Bereaved Son Should Serve?

2009-09-16T09:40:00.000-07:00

Ilan ramon, the first Israeli astronaut , was the space shuttle pilot in the fatal mission of Columbia, where he and six other crew members were killed. Asaf Ramon, Ilan’s Ramon son, found his death, six years after his father's death, also in a plane accident. The question that comes up is: Whether Bereaved Son Should Serve?
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I think that sons of bereaved families Should not serve in a combat position.
First, the bereaved families got through a lot of pain and sadness as a result of a lost theirs son, father or brother . From my personal experience, I know how hard it is to overcome a loss of a close and dear person to your heart.

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Secondly, I think that this is wrong to ask bereaved families to risk another live of a family member , To send them to the army without knowing what would happen to them, and if they finish the army without getting hurt.

In conclusion, I am against letting Bereaved Sons, fathers or brothers to serve in a combat position.If they still want to serve in army, they can serve but not in the combat position .

http://www.israelnationalnews.com/News/News.aspx/133455

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Daphna

Ethiopian pupils not welcome in Petah Tikva

2009-09-13T07:57:00.000-07:00

We are all familiar with the problem of racial discrimination against the Ethiopian.

What is a racial discrimination?. Racial discrimination is treating people differently through a process of social division into categories not necessarily related to races. Unfortunately, this problem harms the education of Ethiopian kids that can't go to school .

Ethiopian kids was banned from religious schools in Petah Tikva. In my opinion, it is unfortunate that some people discriminate others because of their skin color, not allowing them to live a peaceful life.

I think that no one has the right to prevent kids from going to school and gain knowledge.

Many of these children were born in Israel and so presumably do not suffer academically for lack of Hebrew and there is no reasonable reason why they can’t go to a religious schools.

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In conclusion, we are all equal Despite the difference in our color skin, ethnic and religious beliefs. I hope that this problem will be solved in the near future.

http://makom.haaretz.com/topic.asp?rId=145

school uniform

2009-06-04T02:53:00.000-07:00

In many school's students obligated to wear School uniforms . Today school uniform is a shirt with a print of the school symbol . Teacher’s and the school administration think that the school uniform is very important , but students don’t like to wear it.

On one hand , school uniform very important because when student’s wear the uniform they show respect to the school and to his rules.
In addition the uniform isn’t so expensive and all the students can afford it.
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On the other hand, the school uniform isn’t so attractive and pretty, teenagers don’t like to wear it because they want to look good where ever they go.
In addition school uniform cancel the difference between the styles of the student’s.
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In my opinion school uniform should be like in some of school’s in USA that concludes a skirt for girls pants for the boys and a jacket of the school colors, or the school uniform should be cancelled completely.

Burge McCall

2009-04-21T10:09:00.000-07:00

In the story Burge McCall we read about a relationship between Burge McCall and his wife, Mrs. McCall. Burge McCall was a short, heavy-set man. He was very stingy, a lady killer, violent and selfish .The thing that Burge most heated(sp.) in his wife was the way that she looked at him, that made him nervous. Mrs. McCall was a tall, thin woman with black hair and big black eyes. She didn’t talk a lot and other women always called her Mrs. McCall .

In the firs part of the story Burge McCall and Mrs. McCall hated each other. Burge never could understand he’s(sp.) wife (Start a new sentence) when he called her names, she never answered back, unlike he’s(sp.) two first wife’s(sp.), she only looked at him. One day, Burge slapped he’s(sp.) wife on the face because he didn’t liked(gr.) the way she looked at him.

In the second part of the story Burge changed his attitude towards his wife. He got to taking her to the movies and to picnics. He always spoke nicely to her. Burge started to treat he’s(sp.) wife better because he thought his wife wanted to poison him with rat poison. He became a good and caring husband so MRS. McCall didn't have a reason to poison him.

Finally, Burge and his wife lived a happy life, inspite of all the disagreements and the problems that were between them(phr. - "...that they had.") - Is this your conclusion? It's Ok, but too short and general. And what about your opinion on the change in their relationship?.

Pay attention to your spelling and punctuation.

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Daphna

Homework

2009-02-26T02:59:00.000-08:00

Many students think that homework is not necessary, and that teachers don't need to give any. The students think that homework needs to be done only in the classroom not at home.
For example, an eleven year old student from the USA wrote an essay against homework.
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Students sometimes are not concentrated during the lesson or speak and laugh with their friends. Homework exist exactly for these students. when someone needs to do homework’s he needs to go over the material and this way he learns the material that he missed during the lesson.
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Unfortunately, most students are not aware of the significances of homework. When you do the homework you understand the material better and you get more experience with the material. when the test comes the chance that you will get a high grade is higher.
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In conclusion, homework is necessary and important. Preparing homework not takes a lot of time but helps a lot, you understand better the material and remember it for a longer time.

Good work, but too many grammar mistakes. You tend to use the present progressive where the present simple is required. Pay attention to that and correct your work.

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Daphna.

Outer space

2009-02-12T03:01:00.000-08:00

Since 1975 many people are exploring the outer space. since then countries are doing every thing to be the first to discover some thing new that related to the outer space, for example in 1960's Russia and the USA competed between them witch country will send the first shuttle to the outer space and in the1969 they also competed witch country will send the first men to the moon.
Why is exploration of space so important to the humans?

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On the one hand, space exploration is very important to the humans because it is expanding the knowledge of humanity. Thanks to space exploration humans invented many new things, like the satellites, the sunglasses were first developed by NASA. Since humans started to explore outer space the technology advanced.
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On the other hand, it is very dangerous and expensive to launch a shuttle to outer space. We all witnessed the crashing of the Columbia space shuttle and the death of seven people. If it is so dangerous and expensive why do people continue with the exploration instead of investing time and money in problems that exist on Earth Like global warming and air pollution.
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In conclusion, exploring outer space is an important thing that is expanding the knowledge of humanity, but in my opinion the money that we use for space exploration should be

invested in improving the life on Earth.

It's a bit better, but still needs a lot of work. Read my remarks and correct your work once again. (75)

Daphna.

Peer Pressure

2009-01-29T02:57:00.000-08:00

Many people pressured by they peers in different situations. So who are your peers? How they pressure on you?Peers can be your classmates or your friends. When they try to influence how you act, to get you to do something, or when they get involved and try to pressure you to go one way or another, it's called peer pressure.
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Peers can have a positive influence. For example, Maybe another student in your class pressured on you to learn for testes. You might admire a friend who is always good in math and try to be more like him. These are examples of positive Peer pressure because you influenced by your peer for the better.
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Sometimes peers influence in negative ways. For example, a few of your friend in school might try to convince you to cut class with them, or your friend might try to convince you to lie to your parents, or try cigarettes or drugs. This is a negative pressure because your peers are convincing you to do bad things.
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In conclusion, peer pressure can be positive but also negative. Even though the negative peer pressure is existing we don't have to use negative peer pressure, instead we can use positive peer pressure and that way help each other.

2009-01-15T03:02:00.000-08:00

15.1.09

Dear Mishel,

I read your letter,I understand that you dont know what to do to climb on the mountain or not. I know it seems too difficult to decide what to do when your friends are involved. So think what is more important to you, your life or a friendship.

I understened that you are going on a trip with your friends and that the trip includes climbing on a very high mountain and you don't have any experience in climbing. So, you probably think that there is no solution to your problem. Why not to talk to your friends and tell them that you are afraid to be hurt in the climbing? You should not be afriad to hurt them feelings. I'm sure that they will understand you.

I hope that I did help you with your problem, and that you will make the right decision for you.

Good luck and enjoy your trip.

Anastasia

The War in Gaza

2009-01-07T06:40:00.001-08:00

I am living in the central area of Israel and I am fifteen years old.Although I am not living in the South I know what the people that are living there have to go through every day because they are attacked by Missile of the Hamas.They are hardly able to go out of their bomb shelters,The children not able to go to school or to kindergarten.This in not a way of life,because of that I support the decision of attacking the Hamas.I hope that this war will end soon and all the soldiers that are in Gaza will return home.

Informal letter

2008-12-21T09:04:00.000-08:00

21.12.08
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Dear Kate,
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Hi, how are you? I hope everything is going well.Are you having a good time in Eilat? I'm sorry I haven't written in a while, I was busy with my school tests.
I want to tell you about something surprising that has happened to me in the summar.
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It happened on the eighth of August, on my birthday . I woke up and my parents congratulated me, then I went with my mother to the supermarket because I needed to buy things for my birthday party in the evening. When I got home from the supermarket I saw a letter from my friends Daria and Sara. When I read the letter I understood that they prepared a game for me. The game was a treasure hunt. I started to collect all the letters that they had written to me.

I went from my house to Daria's house, then to Sara's house and in the end I returned to my house and discovered that they had decorated my house with balloons and they gave me a present and a birthday card .
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It was a very fun birthday and I enjoyed so much to search for the letters on a treasure hunt. I hope that you enjoyed to read my letter. write soon. I want to know what you think about the surprise that my friends have made for me.
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Hope to see you soon,
Anastasia

2008-12-11T08:21:00.001-08:00

Zodiac

Zodiac denotes an annual cycle of twelve stations along the ecliptic, the apparent path of the Sun across the heavens through the constellations that divide the ecliptic into twelve equal zones of celestial longitude. The zodiac is recognized as the first known celestial coordinate system.

Babylonian astronomers developed the zodiac of twelve signs. Aries March 21 – April 20[15],Taurus April 21 – May 22,Gemini May 22 – June 23,Cancer June 23 – July 23,Leo July 23 – August 23, Virgo August 23 – September 23,Libra September 23 – October 23,Scorpio October 24 – November 22, Sagittarius November 23 – December 21,Capricorn December 22 – January 20, Aquarius January 20 – February 19, Pisces February 19 – March 21.

The zudiacs are used by the Astrologers but also by the pepole in ever day life.

Chinese calendar

The Chinese calendar is lunisolar, incorporating elements of a lunar calendar with those of a solar calendar. This measure of time is not exclusive to China, but followed by many other Asian cultures. It is often referred to by the Western cultures as the Chinese calendar because it was first used by the Chinese.

The Chinese calendar includes Twelve animals. The animals that represent the twelve Earthly Branches are, in order, the rat, ox, tiger, rabbit, dragon, snake, horse, sheep (or goat), monkey, rooster, dog, and pig (or boar).A legend explains the sequence in which the animals were assigned. Supposedly, the twelve animals fought over the precedence of the animals in the cycle of years in the calendar, so the Chinese gods held a contest to determine the order. All the animals lined up on the bank of a river and were given the task of getting to the opposite shore. Their order in the calendar would be set by the order in which the animals managed to reach the other side.

In most of East Asia today, the Gregorian calendar is used for day to day activities, but the Chinese calendar is still used for marking traditional East Asian holidays.

2008-11-20T07:18:00.000-08:00

I would like to tell you about the place that I visited with my friend on our annual trip. Masada is the name of a site of ancient palaces and fortress in the South District of Israel on top of an isolated rock plateau.

Masada is a very special place to the Jewish nation.Because 936 inhabitants were hiding in Masada from Roman governor of Judea, Lucius Flavius Silva.He want to breach the wall of Masada with the Roman legion X Fretensis. The Jewish people that were inside of Masada had set all the buildings but the food storerooms ablaze and committed mass suicide rather than face certain capture, defeat, slavery or execution by their enemies.

I recommand to visit in Masada. Its a very interesting place with a sad history and beautiful view on the dead sea.

Very short, although well structured. You have a serious spelling problem and many grammar mistakes. I would like to add more to the description of the place - this was, after all the purpose of the assignment.

Daphna.

2008-09-18T03:11:00.001-07:00

My name is Anastasia. I am fifteen years old. I was born on the 8th of August. I have brown hair, green eyes and my height is 1.70. I live with my parents and my little brother in Israel. My brother's name is Adam, and he's three years old.

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I don't have any special hobbies. I am just as every normal teen - I like watching television, playing on the computer and going out with my friends. I also like to read books. It's nice not to think about anything and take a break from the real world.

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I study in the 10th grade in a science class. In science class, we learn all the subjects, like math and English, but we also learn chemisty, biology and physics. There are few subjects I don't like to learn like litreature and Bible- these subjects are boring!

Im my opinion this subjects are boring because in that lessons all that we do is copy from the board and listen to tje teacher.We dont express ours opinion about the subject of the lesson.

I hope that in this year my greats will be good and that the lessons of litreature and Bible woll'd be so boring like they use to be in lest year.

Also I hope that teas year will be a good year and a fun year.

2008-09-18T03:11:00.000-07:00

The person I would like to tell you about is Sara.

She was born on the 28th of September 1993 in Israel and she lives in holon.

I know Sara since the first grade but we became best friend only in the fifth grade and we are still best friends.

Sara is very creative persone.She likes to write poems,read books and all the things that are connected to writing.She also loves to listen to music and she knows how to play on a piano.

Sara is a very calm person and usually dosen't get angry very fast. She is also a very funny,caring and loving pearson.

I love to be with her.She is the only one that know all about me and she is always there when I have a problem or when I just need to talk with some one.She know that I am always there for her.

when we are together all what we are doing is laughing or talking about many different things like school,boys.

So thats my best firend Sara. I can say that Sara is like my sister.

I am so glad that I have such a good friend and I thank God every day that I met Sara.