I would like to tell you about the place that I visited with my friend on our annual trip. Masada is the name of a site of ancient palaces and fortress in the South District of Israel on top of an isolated rock plateau.

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Masada is a very special place to the Jewish nation.Because 936 inhabitants  were hiding in  Masada from  Roman governor of Judea, Lucius Flavius Silva.He want  to breach the wall of Masada with the Roman legion X Fretensis. The Jewish people that were inside of Masada had set all the buildings but the food storerooms ablaze and committed mass suicide rather than face certain capture, defeat, slavery or execution by their enemies.

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I recommand to visit in Masada. Its a very interesting place with a sad history and beautiful  view on the dead sea.

Very short, although well structured. You have a serious spelling problem and many grammar mistakes. I would like to add more to the description of the place - this was, after all the purpose of the assignment.

Daphna.